Introduction

Dear Miss Lim

Let me begin by introducing myself. My name is Andy Johanly, before coming to Singapore Institute of Technology, I graduated from Nanyang Polytechnic with Diploma in Biomedical Engineering few months back. Currently I am pursuing a degree in Sustainable Infrastructure Engineering (Land). The reason for me to change field is because I feel that the land transportation sector in Singapore is growing rapidly and I want to be a part in this growing sector.

From my past experiences in polytechnic and internship, I believe that my strengths in communication is that I am comfortable with giving my opinion during a group discussion. During group discussion when I find things that can be improved, I will usually voice out my idea for improvements. My next strength will be that I am also a good listener, I always listen to other person’s idea before deciding on a solution that will benefit the group.

My weaknesses in communications is mainly from my stage fright where I always find it hard to present my idea well in front of a group of strangers. I will usually forget to mention or talk about some of the stuff in my presentation. The next weakness will be in writing, where I finds it hard to express my idea in writing as I always finds it weird and unconvincing after reading it.

My goals for this module is for me to reduce my stage fright and to help me to write better so that I could express my idea better especially in school assignment reports or work-related reports.

Yours Sincerely
Andy Johanly

SIE2016-SEM03 Group 1

Comments

  1. UnknownSeptember 16, 2017 at 9:27 AM

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  2. UnknownSeptember 16, 2017 at 9:29 AM

    Hi Andy

    I also have stage fright when I am presenting, let’s work together to overcome this fear.
    Wish you all the best in fulfilling your goals.

    Lakshmi

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  3. UnknownSeptember 16, 2017 at 9:18 PM

    Hi Andy,

    Let's overcome our weaknesses in communication and eventually become a better speaker and writer at then end of the module. Great effort for the blog post!

    Cheers,
    Jason

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  4. UnknownSeptember 17, 2017 at 12:15 AM

    Hi Andy,

    Lets do our best to improve and acquire new communication skills.

    Hope that you will be able overcome your weakness by the end of the module.

    Wan Hao

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  5. UnknownSeptember 17, 2017 at 6:45 AM

    Hi Andy,

    Seeing the land transport sector in Singapore growing rapidly and requiring more engineers was one of the reasons as to why I chose SIE (Land) too! It's good that you're vocal when it comes to group discussions as you would probably be the one to start the ball rolling in the group.
    As for your weakness, it is something I can relate to as I tend to rush through my presentation just to get it over and done with when in front of a group of strangers. I believe that with enough practice and confidence we would both be able to present well in front of others.
    All the best!

    Ze Xuan

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  6. Ms. LimSeptember 17, 2017 at 7:50 AM

    Dear Andy,

    Thank you for the fine first post! This is a clear, concise discussion, and I like the ‘no-frills-just-sincerity’ feeling the writing evokes, if you know what I mean.

    I do have a few questions about coherence and correctness. Please see my comments below:

    Coherence

    The first paragraph talks about your background, and discusses your rationale for changing fields, while the second discusses your strengths in communication. The problem here is that unless you deliberately build a ‘bridge’ to connect the two ideas together, they read like ‘separate entities’, with no relationship to each other whatsoever. While the next two paragraphs are clear where you elaborated on your strengths and weaknesses in communicative situations, the last paragraph abruptly moves onto sharing your goals for a module; and while that may be clear to you, it may not be so for your readers as there is no mention of any module at all in the preceding paragraphs. Can you see where I am coming from?

    Correctness

    Can you spot the problems with these statements?

    • “My name is Andy Johanly, before coming to Singapore Institute of Technology, …”
    • “…and I want to be a part in this growing sector.”
    • “… I believe that my strengths in communication is that I am comfortable with giving my opinion…”
    • “My next strength…”
    • “My weaknesses in communications is mainly…”

    I appreciate your hard work and look forward to reading your future posts!

    Cheers,
    Ms. Lim

    PS: You were tasked to write in the formal letter format

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